Efe returns to Nigeria after years in the United States, dreaming of a happy, independent life. However, everyone expects her to get married, and her nights become plagued by nightmares of Kevwe, her ex-fiancé. Long hours at work and drinking in nightclubs only provide temporary relief. Then Efe encounters Kevwe’s twin brother, and knows it’s a matter of time before he is back in her life. Sparks fly when they finally meet again, but desire is no match for bitter-sweet memories of first love and heartbreak.
All these years, she believed she was rejected; now Kevwe claims she abandoned him after a crippling car accident. Efe had no knowledge of the crash, and blames his family’s unwarranted hatred of her ethnicity for their separation. Stuck at a crossroads, Kevwe prefers to look to the future, pledging he’s never stopped loving her. Efe does not want to lose him, yet she needs the traumatic events of the past resolved before she gives in to rekindled love.
Set in the United States and Nigeria, A LOVE REKINDLED is mainstream romance. The story entertains, is emotionally engaging, and provides a window into another culture, place and people. I’m Nigerian and wanted this book to showcase local characters in a loving relationship. I also witnessed ethnic violence in Warri and decided to explore this topical issue through fiction.
Love stories cut across race and geography, and the conflict in A Love Rekindled will attract adult mainstream and romance readers. I believe romance with non-western characters and settings is an unexplored niche that has enormous potential and plan to write more of such books.
My first novel, a self-published Nigerian romance, was very well received, and has garnered a substantial following on blogger, Facebook and Twitter. It was also subsequently published, to good reviews, in Nigeria.
Efe returns to Nigeria after years in the United States, dreaming of a happy, independent life. [This sentence is a little confusing. I’m pretty sure you’re saying that she’s dreaming of a happy independent life in Nigeria, but it could be confusedas she’s spent her years in the US dreaming of a happy independent life… It stopped me up, that’s why I mention it.] However [I’m not a fan of however and buts. I feel like they’re a road sign, something meant to direct you, but while you’re looking at them, they can be distracting enough to drive you into the ditch. I always look for a way to not use them] , everyone expects her to get married [I assume this is a cultural thing… you may want to make sure that’s stated in some way. I’ll be the first to admit I know next to nothing about Nigerian culture, so that’s just an assumption. But if you’re going to add this expectation in, best not confuse an agent with the whys], and her nights
All these years, she believed she was rejected [was rejected is a) passive and b) a bit vague. Did he stand her up at the altar? Were they supposed to run away together? How was she rejected. I’d word it as “All these years, she believed Kevwe…” so that you get rid of the passivity]; now[now falls into the category of however/but at the beginning of a sentence for me] Kevwe claims she abandoned him after a crippling car accident [I’d take these tow lines and change them a bit... I would write: “All these years, Efe believed Kevwe (backed out of their wedding?) and is heartbroken as he now tells her she abandoned him after a crippling car accident.”].
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Set in the United States and Nigeria, A LOVE REKINDLED is mainstream romance.
My first novel, a self-published Nigerian romance, was very well received, and has garnered a substantial following on blogger, Facebook and Twitter. It was also subsequently published, to good reviews, in Nigeria. [This does nothing for you unless you want to put the title in the query and allow them to look at the bookscans for it, otherwise, I would drop this entirely]
Overall, you need to make sure you’re specifics. A query has to pull in the agent (or more likely their assistant) and they read dozens of queries a day. Vague isn’t going to wow anyone. Make sure your query answers more questions than it poses.
One of the major questions you can get rid of is why the past relationship induces nightmares, etc. Make us want the couple to make it –or make us want her to steer clear.
Also, you didn’t put in a salutation or a sincerely. Always remember to address the agent as Dear Mr./Ms. [last name] and end with a quick line thanking them for their time and consideration. It is after all a courtesy.
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